Though I wasn't sure i could pull it off, so i thought of writing it as a short story. But I went ahead and wrote this as a play and I was happy with the result.
This was so good.. The conversations, the dialogues and the final bit where Amma drags everyone back into reality. I am sure versions of this conversation must be happening across the living rooms in India. And you bring it out in such stark light, Karthik. Great writing!
Loved the coda from Amma :) The exchange throughout was easy to follow. Capturing everyday vignettes is your thing, Karthik.
I would have loved to infer bits of the context you state upfront at the beginning. And the other thing I would have loved is to get what Vik or Appa are feeling in the moment through their actions.
I didn't read your piece as a screenplay, which i should have because it says one-act play. Hence, my pointing out that the information up top feels like exposition is irrelevant. I would take my comment back if that was possible 😂 But that makes me curious too: why did you write this as a screenplay and not just as a piece?
Haha oops!
This story came to me in this form itself.
Though I wasn't sure i could pull it off, so i thought of writing it as a short story. But I went ahead and wrote this as a play and I was happy with the result.
Loved it, Karthik! Simple and deep.
This was so well-written. It was a great capture of the differences of Amma’s world from Appa’s, the expat vs the local, and the old vs the young.
Thanks so much, Priya! So glad you enjoyed these contrasting ways of seeing the world :)
This was so good.. The conversations, the dialogues and the final bit where Amma drags everyone back into reality. I am sure versions of this conversation must be happening across the living rooms in India. And you bring it out in such stark light, Karthik. Great writing!
And yes, most households get going because our Ammas are in charge of the mornings :)
Morning and everything else too
Thanks so much, Sanket! 😊
I even decided the cast as I read it. Naseeruddin Shah as Appa, Siddharth as Son, Revathi as Amma. Very nice. And the Dad joke was the best.
Awww perfect :')
Loved the coda from Amma :) The exchange throughout was easy to follow. Capturing everyday vignettes is your thing, Karthik.
I would have loved to infer bits of the context you state upfront at the beginning. And the other thing I would have loved is to get what Vik or Appa are feeling in the moment through their actions.
Thanks a lot for this feedback, Satyajit!
I did not understand the first part - about what you could infer from the context. Please elaborate when you can.
Yes yes they could do be doing some actions to suggest their feelings. This can really enrich this script. Thank you :)
I didn't read your piece as a screenplay, which i should have because it says one-act play. Hence, my pointing out that the information up top feels like exposition is irrelevant. I would take my comment back if that was possible 😂 But that makes me curious too: why did you write this as a screenplay and not just as a piece?
So funny! Really captures the Sunday morning mood. Also "Trying to change the world on facebook" is a perfect description.
Thank you, Amrita! Makes me happy that you found it funny. I totally love that wry sense of humour some older people have :)